Michiyo Ichimaru (ichimaru_sama) wrote in somewritesongs,
Michiyo Ichimaru
ichimaru_sama
somewritesongs

A song, if I may...


My most recent song, currently without an existing title, that I would really like some feedback on. That includes a title, if something comes to mind that you would like to suggest. Thank you very much. ^_^

[Verse 1]
I was walking home - all alone - feel the gravity of heartbreak
You were sitting there - on the swings - just kicking the concrete
And I looked in your eyes and I saw - my reflection - all the lies

[Bridge]
Are you a god of the concrete skies?
Can you see the gloom invading my life?
Is there something I can do?
You'll tell me, won't you?

[repeat chorus]

[Verse 2]
I was walking home - now with you - and you refuse to let me go
A closer look and - I can tell - everything I thought was wrong
You are not a god but a small - small child - at heart

[Alt-Bridge 1]
Are you following the concrete skies?
Can you see the gloom invading my life?
Is there something I can do?
You'll tell me, won't you?

[repeat Chorus]

[Verse 3]
When I made it home - you were there - and you asked me if you could stay
Looking in your eyes - I can tell - that I was wrong and you're no child
You look at the sky - not afraid - not aware

While I was staring at the gloom in the skies
You were staring at the gloom in my eyes
Look down, you say, holding on to me
And looking in your eyes I see myself
Looking in your eyes I see myself
And I kinda like the me I see

[Alt-Bridge 2]
Are you fighting the concrete skies?
Can you erase the gloom invading my life?
Is there something you can do?
You won't leave me, will you?

[repeat chorus]
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